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1.The first paragraph answers the W-H questions: Who, when, why, how much, etc
I started at 8.30am through Subway.In, Subway I faced some problems like a signal problem and I didn't get a seat so hardly one hour I stood there. My husband drop's me in CN Tower so easily arrived there at 9.50am. I went inside near to the ticket counter.At first I worried a little bit because I didn't see anybody.Suddenly I turned left side I met Wen and Chee I was so happy.Later on we took a group photos. Later on We were waiting 1hour because in ticket counter we got a problem. In ticket counter they said your tickets are not correct because they couldn't find our tickets in online.They rejected our tickets. The security guard's accused to us.First we disappointed.Joseph said please apologized me. Joseph has given better idea that is we have one alternative program those are going to 1) Harborfront2)HTO park3)Toronto music garden. He embarrassed about some things those are somebody kid's, friends, family members came to there.We went outside and planned to go harborfront.I had to wait there who would come with me.Toronto police's were come to there for this tickets issue.They started the inquiry about that situation, but they couldn't find any evidence. They wasted Joseph time.Me, Rana and Rana daughter went to Harborfront and Toronto Railway museum. I am first time to go near to Toronto railway museum nice place. I come back with Rana, Sassy, Thalin, and Rana daughter. Joseph refunded our money at the workshop. Anyways we made the best of our field trip. Thank you so much Joseph and friends.
After corrections:
I started on the subway at 8.30am.On the way I faced some problems like a signal problem, and I didn't get a seat, so I stood there for one hour. My husband dropped me at CN Tower so I easily arrived there at 9.50am.I went inside near to the ticket counter. At first I was bit worried because I didn't see anybody, suddenly I turned left and met Wen and Qi I was so happy. Later on we took some group photos.we waited one hour because at the ticket counter we had a problem.They said your tickets are not correct because they couldn't find our tickets in online. They rejected our tickets. The security guards accused of fraud. We were disappointed. Joseph said apologized to me. He suggested that we have an alternative program to 1)Harbourfront 2)HTO park 3)Toronto music park. He was embarrassed for those with kids, friends, and family members who had come with us. We went outside and planned to go to Harbourfront. I had to wait there for those who would come with us. Toronto polices came to investigate the ticket issue. They started the inquiry about that situation, but they couldn't find any evidence of fraud. They wasted Joseph's time. Rana, Rana's daughter, and I went to Harbourfront and Toronto Railway museum. It was first my time going to Railway museum. It was nice place. I came back with Rana, Rana daughter, Sassy, and Thalin. Joseph refunded our money back in class. Anyways we made the best of our field trip. Thank you so much Joseph and friends.
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